Poem: Hate Vomit
65Hate Vomit
you feel it twisting in your stomach
it burns in your abdomen like fire
a rampaging bull riding up your gorge
your face turns red and you heave
i hate you i hate you
i wish you would die
i loathe you, despise you
my kind words were lies
it may not be what you said
but your wheezing and hacking
tells me all i need to know
while you're doubled over in violent hatred
i hate you i hate you
i wish you would die
i loathe you, despise you
my kind words were lies
with tears in your eyes
and wiping your mouth
the waves of hate have diminished
your hate vomit has run out..
i still hate you
i still hate you
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Yes, I agree.
And a poem is a personal thing, rhyme and reason belong entirely to the writer. So, logically speaking, there should be nothing to criticise. But I can say what I feel, and I appreciate the anger and hate in the poem.
Keep going, Charlotte!
Thank you Kenny! I can only hope that my poems have, and will be, a display of the extremes of human emotion. Our emotions are rarely mild, though we may hide them.
Very passionate!
Very real emotions. I too have experienced these feelings before and in my mind's eyes I saw hundreds of plates flying and hitting a certain person. Whew! Boy am I glad I am getting healed, it was very tiring to be angry.
-michelle
very nice, you deffinetly captured what its like when thats happening.. well at least thats how i feel lol =]
Was this episode a result of drinking copious amounts of alcohol? Great stuff!
um wtf!!?!
gamergirl Hub Author 4 years ago
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